Minequest V0.3 by rey1119

[rey1119]

I've actually only played 1 VN in my life that was Katawa Shoujo. this is my first VN I've made. there are a few bugs and its fairly short, I would love feedback and recomendations! keep in mine (see what i did there) that its unfinished ^_^

download:
V0.2: http://www.mediafire.com/?y1mp86py1y06iv4
V0.3: http://www.mediafire.com/?uxlqo7666j64jlb

change-log:
added spider ending!
lots and lots of big fixes
lots of grammar fixes

bugs:
sometimes you can loop and be forced to re-name characters
some character names can appear as "undefined" this simply means you haven't given them a nickname when you were supposed to.

[fleet]

Congratulations on making your first visual novel. Many folks never get as far as you did..
I played it through once. The graphics and sound are okay. I didn't notice any problems with the menus. The story does not have a conclusion; I assume it is a demo. If is it a demo I have no comments on the story. If it is the full story, what happened to the main character (did the monster girls kill or eat him, did he find out why they wanted to kill him, did he escape)?
You should put more effort into using correct capitalization and punctuation. I would strongly recommend getting a proofreader to review your work before you make a public release. The personal pronoun "I" is always capitalized, as are contractions using the personal pronoun (such as "I'll"). Likewise, the first letter of the first word of a sentence is always capitalized. The first letter of a person's name is also capitalized. You need to be careful and include the apostrophe when you use contractions.

Many people would not even bother to look at a VN when the announcement post has multiple capitalization and punctuation errors. It shows that the author didn't put much effort into his post, and that strongly implies that the VN itself will contain lots of similar errors.

Very respectfully,
Fleet

[rey1119]

That reply was awesome! I will make the necessary changes! thank you!

EDIT: v0.3 is up! i hope you can test it and give me more feedback! there are a few {MAJOR} bugs though.
loops in the storty, im far too tired to fix them, but i did so much, i felt i had to do a relese!