Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

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Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Kumatan » Sat Aug 20, 2011 10:51 pm

Aha so hi. I'm new to this forum as well as programming things like these visual novels. It was hard making my first one, but i managed any way.This is my first visual novel just introducing things from me. :lol: Im not advanced or anything but i just need help sometimes. I hope you guys enjoy this..though it's nothing special.

EDIT: This link should work now...
http://www.4shared.com/file/v-O-rNwP/Introduction.html?

Also..I tried to target people who don't know what visual novels are and this game isn't just for this forum either. Please, i really don't want to hear that you already know what a visual novel means..I mean you probably already do considering you're reading this. But yeah..just thanks for watching ;w;.

If the link doesnt work...then tell me.

Any tips?
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby fleet » Sun Aug 21, 2011 1:55 am

Hello, welcome to the forums!

EDIT: Link now works

very respectfully,
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Why? I like big ones, that's why.
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Kumatan » Sun Aug 21, 2011 8:02 pm

Thanks for the tip OwO. I'll post up a new link if i can find out how to do it OTL.
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby fleet » Sun Aug 21, 2011 11:28 pm

The updated link works fine; I was able to play the game. I thought it was cute, and good for a first effort.

Two suggestions:
(1) lower the volume on the background music, I could barely Kuma's voice.
(2) On the slide where the main character said, "Oh, pleaase. It isn't thaat bad." I suggest you use upper case letters if you are trying to emphasize the words 'please' and 'that'.

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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Kumatan » Sun Aug 21, 2011 11:50 pm

Ah thank you. I will keep that in mind. :D Thank you for...sorta..."playing" the game. :lol:
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Avaible » Mon Aug 22, 2011 4:25 pm

I read it, and now I hope we will see some vnovels from you in the future :)
Also, welcome to the forum and Novelty.
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Kumatan » Tue Aug 23, 2011 3:14 am

Thank you very much! :) Is there anyting wrong with it besides the ones listed?
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Avaible » Tue Aug 23, 2011 1:54 pm

No, not really, it was too short to say anything about it. Without a proper story I can't really tell you what to improve, right? ;)
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Kumatan » Tue Aug 23, 2011 10:11 pm

Oh....ahhaha that makes sense. :lol: I'm making a longer one,though. It'd be great if i got criticized on that.
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Re: Introduction Visual Novel(Complete)

Postby Avaible » Wed Aug 24, 2011 7:29 am

Sure, no problem, once you're finished.
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